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江苏卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
Good afternoon, everyone,
The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10：00am~11:00am on April 29，2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.
The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.
In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!
Thank you!
名师点评：
本文的结构十分明晰，同时句式使用得熟练而准确。本文分为三段，前两段叙述，后一段发表观点，典型的作文结构。在句式使用上，作者用法多样，使用了独立结构和虚拟语气，十分出彩。复杂的句式是本文的特点之一。
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好词1.wage v.发动2.aim v.瞄准3. advocate v.提倡
好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.
教育部提倡我们每天做一个小时的运动，能够健康地活50年。
好处：advocate，其后接虚拟语气，可以省略情态动词。
2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records.
如果我们不进行运动，我们的成绩就不会很好。
好处：虚拟语气
满分文(二)
Good afternoon, everyone,
Its my honor to be here to give you a speech. On April 29，2007 the national student sports program was held from 10∶00am~11∶00am in many primary and middle schools all over China. It is the Ministry of Education that promotes this program. In Jiangsu, about 11 milloin students took part in the activity.
The theme of this program is “do exercises for one hour per day, work for 50 years healthily and lead a happy life”. In my viewpoint, this is quite good for us senior students. We do exercises one hour a day and we can gain health, which lay a solid foundation for our future. That will be very good. So boys and girls，come and join us now!
Thank you!
名师点评：
文章的结构很清楚，内容和要点把握得也比较完整。本文十分符合演讲稿的要求，写得比较出色。第一段中用了强调句，指出了发起项目的主体。作者用并列的方式解释了主题，十分出色。定语从句也用的很好、很到位。
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好词1. promote v.促进2. foundation n.基础3. gain v.获得
好句1. It is the Ministry of Education that promotes this program.
是教育部推动了这个计划。
好处：强调句的使用十分准确。
2. We do exercises one hour a day and we can gain health, which lay a solid foundation for our future.
每天锻炼一小时我们的身体就会很健康，而这也为将来打下了坚实的基础。
好处：lay a solid foundation，为…打下坚实基础。
浙江卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
I prefer my English classes to be taught in both English and Chinese, whose advantage is that it is easy for us to understand what the teacher talks about. The teacher first teaches the class in English, and then she explains those that are hard to understand to us so that we get a better knowing of the passage. That will be good for us.
However, teaching the class in two languages will make the English atmosphere not so strong. Some students who wish to be taught in English will be disappointed.
Except for the disadvantage, I think it is really good to hear two languages in classes. It can make us more familiar with the foreign culture.
名师点评：
审题是作文的第一要素，本文的审题准确无误。无论是要点的把握还是结构的组织都证明了这一点。本文运用多种复杂句式，整体看来是不错的。文中的一个复合句式显示了作者的英语功底。其他出彩短语的使用也很地道，可以参看好句中的分析。
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好词1.advantage n.优点2.be familiar with，对某人熟悉3. atmosphere n.气氛
好句1. I prefer my English classes to be taught in both English and Chinese, whose advantage is that it is easy for us to understand what the teacher talks about.
我更喜欢采用双语教学，其优点是可以更好地理解老师的话。
好处：定语从句很好地组织了复杂句，同时prefer等词组的使用很地道。
2. Some students who wish to be taught in English will be disappointed.
那些希望英语授课的学生们可能会失望了。
好处：定语从句和wish to do的使用。
满分文(二)
I prefer my English classes to be taught only in English because it is helpful for us to improve the ability of speaking and listening in a very short time. I have strong interest in English study and foreign culture, so Id like to be totally immersed in the atmosphere of English so that I can quickly make progress. Thats why I prefer total English. However, since we are all English beginners, its really hard to understand all that the teacher says. Sometimes we need Chinese explanation. So my viewpoint is that we are taught not only in English but also using Chinese as a minor way to explain things that are hard to understand.
名师点评：
本文写作十分成功。语言和句式是本文最大的特点。好词中词汇的使用，将作者的意思表达得完整而准确，从而映衬了词汇的重要性；其次，本文的句式以复杂句为主，表语、定语和状语从句的使用都十分到位。
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好词：1. immerse v.沉浸2. explanation n.解释3. make progress 取得进步
好句：1. I have strong interest in English study and foreign culture, so Id like to be totally immersed in the atmosphere of English so that I can quickly make progress.
我对英语学习和外国文化有着浓厚的兴趣，因此我想沉浸在英语的学习氛围中，使得我能更快地进步。
好处：be immersed in 沉浸其中；so that 表示目的。
2. So my viewpoint is that we are taught not only in English but using Chinese as a minor way to explain things that are hard to understand.
因此，我的观点是，用英文教授，同时对于一些难以理解的内容用中文进行辅助讲解。
好处：表语从句使用正确。
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